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13 Things to Avoid When Writing About Games

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Tuesday, January 12, 2010

Technical writing/grammar stuff:

9. Don't: Use dangling modifiers

Wrong:

After clearing off the dinner table, the kitchen was full of dirty plates.

"The kitchen" did not "clear off the dinner table." "After clearing off the dinner table" is a modifier that describes the next thing you see after the comma.

Correct:

After clearing off the dinner table, the kids went to play Nintendo PlayStation.

10. Don't: Use comma splices

Whenever you have two independent clauses (two phrases that are complete sentences by themselves), they can NOT be separated by just a comma or just a conjunction (although a conjunction without a comma is OK if the clauses are super short).

Wrong:

I left work early that day, I got to the game on time that night.

Wrong:

I left work early that day so I got to the game on time that night.

Correct:

I left work early that day, so I got to the game on time that night. (comma + conjunction)

Alternatively, you could use a semicolon, em dash (two hyphens with spaces on either side -- like this), or just separate them into two sentences. The main thing is, you can’t just have a comma separating two independent clauses.

11. Don't: Forget to punctuate correctly

a. If you have an independent clause after a colon, start that clause with a capital letter.

Correct:

We have many hobbies: We watch football, we snowboard, and we play video games.

We have many hobbies: watching football, snowboarding, and playing video games.

Also note we keep the serial comma: the last comma in the series.

b. Punctuation generally goes within quotes, unless it’s a question or exclamation mark that is associated with the outside sentence.

Correct:

I like it when she says, “Let’s watch the Michigan game.”

She always asks me, “Can we watch the Michigan game?” (The question mark goes with the quote.)

Those guys dressed in scarlet and gray? They're stupid drunk and don't even know what a touchdown is. Do we need to sit by those “football fans”? (The quote isn’t the question; the main sentence is.)

c. If you have a complete sentence inside of parentheses, you would treat it like a complete sentence (with a capital letter and period within the parentheses).

Correct:

I love Mighty Muggs (generally speaking).

I love Mighty Muggs. (We like toys in general, I guess.)

Technical stuff:

12. Don’t: Forget to fill out the Tags, Metadata Keywords, and Metadata Description

These things help search engines and other people find your stories. Any games mentioned in your stories should be tagged.

13. Don't: Forget to complete your hyperlinks

For links, always fill out the “title” field with what that link is (a story description or headline, website name, game name, etc.). Hint: This is the floating text that appears when you hover your mouse over a link.

Bitmob links open in the same window; outside links open in a new window.

 
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Comments (42)
37425_412468101714_719286714_4780931_4814727_n
January 12, 2010
More articles like this please. Cliches aside,this type of article is fantastic for a place like Bitmob. Any way you guys could form some kind of regular column on writing and editing?
Photo-3
January 12, 2010
I wish I had a Nintendo PlayStation but these tough economic times make buying super consoles a bit unaffordable.
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January 12, 2010
I've always wondered if it's appropriate to use punctuation outside of quotes, and now I know it IS possible! Thanks for doing this, it was very informative!
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January 12, 2010
@Shoe: What do I do with adverbs...what are adverbs...I'm so confused...please....help me.... I find it ironic that I spent 6th grade English sitting in the back reading EGM, and you are telling me all this. Great, if all too elementary, info. Or, perhaps not for the Internet: "[u]My First Review[/u]: HALO 3=WIN! FUCK ALL YALL" :clicks submit story:) Now for the hard hitting questions Prof. Shoe: Why the hell do we capitalize "Internet"?
Photo-3
January 12, 2010
@Allistar I'm not Shoe, but: Adverbs modify words that aren't nouns. They usually end in -ly and tell you how something is done. The aspiring video game journalist [i]passionately[/i] wrote about the Xbox. vs. The aspiring video game journalist wrote about the Xbox. Check out wikipedia if you want to expand your knowledge: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Adverb
Alexemmy
January 12, 2010
@Allistair - Because Internet is the title of it, I think. Like you would capitalize a book title. At least that's my guess.
Jamespic4
January 12, 2010
[quote]I like it when she says, “Let’s watch the Michigan game.”[/quote] Haha! I love how your examples make sure to include Michigan football and Mighty Muggs.
Photo-3
January 12, 2010
the man writes about what he knows.
59208264_l
January 12, 2010
I would like to point out that I love Bitmob for articles like these. Michigan sucks.
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January 12, 2010
lol, I know what adverbs are. I was joking. I have a feeling 'Internet' is capitalized due to it being an abstract country or place.
Jason_wilson
January 12, 2010
@Allistair The Internet is considered a proper noun by most authorities of grammar and style. This is why it is capitalized. For adverbs: You active verbs that best caption what you mean. This way, you won't need adverbs.
Ragnaavatar2
January 12, 2010
Excellent article, not just for writing about videogames, but writing in general. I know I've commited one or two "don't"s listed here. ;D
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January 12, 2010
Argh! My school newspaper has taught me for the past three years to ditch serial commas! I can't just re-RE-learn them! GET OUT OF MY HEAD, CHARLES!
New_hair_029
January 12, 2010
This reminds me of how bad I am at using commas :'(
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January 12, 2010
Very informative,and at the same time scares the hell out of me because as much as I have been yearning to do editorial pieces regarding videos games and other topics I've been weary of the fact that I'll end up being pan for not just the issues you touched on but for minor,absent minded mistakes like syntax and grammar.It's hard to get your point across when you leave out an article,or worst,a whole clause that is suppose to detonate the subject at hand.
Shoe_headshot_-_square
January 12, 2010
AJ: Serial commas are definitely by preference and will vary from outlet to outlet -- no one right or wrong way there, but that is *our* preference...to keep them. Derek: Maybe! Jason has something coming up, and I'm doing that "public" critique of someone's story...so we'll try to find fun and interesting ways to help.
Hib1
January 12, 2010
For a second there, I thought you were talking about that list: http://videosgames.wordpress.com/games-journalism-wnts/
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January 12, 2010
But I love history :(
Jason_wilson
January 12, 2010
@Antonio Good writing technique: Strip your sentences down to the minimum -- subject, verb, object -- in your draft. Work forward from that point.
Jason_wilson
January 12, 2010
@AJ Dropping that final comma in a list is an Associated Press style rule. The serial, of "oxford," comma appears in more meatier work, books, and academic writing.
January 12, 2010
One tool I find invaluable when writing for an audience is a text-to-speech reader. I personally use ReadPlease. When you don't have someone else to proof your work, listening to it being read back to you is an excellent means of ferreting out grammar and formatting issues spell check alone cannot find. It's not perfect -- i.e. ReadPlease's Mike pronounces the word 'read' in this post as 'reed' -- but it has enabled my PC to become the editor I never had.
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January 12, 2010
I just read an interesting story about adverbs on io9. I'll share it here for those interested. [url] http://io9.com/5437610/seriously-whats-so-bad-about-adverbs?skyline=true&s;=x[/url]
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January 12, 2010
Thanks for this post. I didn't know about the intricacies of quoting punctuation, and you reminded me of some other things that I routinely forget. Last year, I read through the Simon & Schuster [u]Handbook for Writers[/u], and since then I've tried to follow its lessons to the best of my ability. In the section on voice in verbs, the Handbook explains how the active voice is more direct and dramatic than the passive voice, yet it also mentions proper uses of the passive voice. For example, passive voice is appropriate when the doer of the action is unimportant. You probably did this on purpose, but the first sentence of your passive voice section is passive. ([i]It’s considered[/i] bland and lifeless.) The doer of the action (reader, editors, most people) isn't as important as the "it" acted upon, or what happens to "it." So I think it's unfair to tell writers to never use the passive voice when it can be used sparingly in the right context. Writing in short, vigorous sentences is important for clarity, but I find certain situations can justify usage of the passive voice.
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January 12, 2010
Cheers very much for all these writing tips! i'll put them to good use ;)
Waahhninja
January 12, 2010
Would that fancy Nintendo Playstation be the prototype disc-drive that was almost announced before Nintendo pulled the switcheroo and sided with Phillips? If so, those are some unlucky kids!
Default_picture
January 12, 2010
This article is great. If I ever think of anything to actually post on here, this'll help if I need to consult it. PS. Your punctuation in quotes example has raised my ire, therefore I shall fart in your general direction! (GO BUCKS! >:P)
4540_79476034228_610804228_1674526_2221611_n
January 12, 2010
Best. Help. Ever! Aspiring gaming journalists rejoice! Looking forward to part II.
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January 12, 2010
I'll miss roman numerals. I'm not even joking, I think they're all kinds of awesome in the ranges of I to VIII. @Any Bitmob editor - What's the deal with copyright when it comes to using images? Is it kosher to include pictures or screengrabs I just pull from the Internet?
Jason_wilson
January 12, 2010
@Luke I miss Roman numerals as well. I think it's awful that because of SEO, we need to use Arabic numerals.
Shoe_headshot_-_square
January 13, 2010
Spencer: Passive voice is definitely not wrong, and we're overcompensating here telling people not to use it... but 9 times out of 10, the sentence is better in active voice. I don't like to teach writers when it's OK to use passive voice, because then they *always* think their uses are one of those "OK" times. Easier for me to tell them to eliminate it completely, THEN pull back a little and let them see when it's OK to go passive. Because by then, they've thoroughly learned the differences....
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January 13, 2010
And if you're serious about becoming a writer: 14. Do: Read Strunk and White's [url=http://www.amazon.com/Elements-Style-50th-Anniversary/dp/0205632645/ref=sr_1_2?ie=UTF8&s;=books&qid;=1263440914&sr;=8-2]Element's of Style[/url]. Never leave home without it. 14a. Do: Read Stephen King's [url=http://www.amazon.com/Writing-Stephen-King/dp/0743455967/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&s;=books&qid;=1263441035&sr;=1-1]On Writing[/url]. It's more about fiction writing, but it's still a fantastic book for any sort of writer.
Jason_wilson
January 13, 2010
@Craig Stunk and White is a bit outdated, actually. It's a good intro, but you should move up to more modern usage guides.
Jason_wilson
January 13, 2010
@Craig Three instances are well suited for the use of passive voice. I advise, however, that you master the use of the active voice first (unless you plan on writing press releases for a government).
Brett_new_profile
January 13, 2010
@Luke: Generally fair use applies for images. Just try not to use images watermarked by other game sites. No free advertising! :)
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January 13, 2010
I am still trying to improve my writing, and Bitmob is great practice for me so that I won't fall flat on my face when I return to school after a long absence. So far I have got some positive encouragement. Thanks folks!
Img_20110311_100250
January 13, 2010
Haha, I showed my girlfriend (an OSU fan) this page and she didn't find it quite as funny and awesome as I did.
Img_20110311_100250
January 13, 2010
Go Blue!
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January 15, 2010
Im gonna try this in my english classes. You had better be right Dan. BTW your conclusion was weak. ;)
Jason_wilson
January 16, 2010
Writing tip: To understand today, journalists need to know about yesterday. Be sure to learn a great deal about history, especially the history of any field you seek to cover.
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January 16, 2010
@Jason: I completely agree. I'm glad there's someone else who sees the value in history.
Jason_wilson
January 16, 2010
@Brian Aspiring journalists should have a well-rounded education. I carry minors in government and history (two courses short of a BA in history). I also studied economics and biology.
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January 17, 2010
I've come to find that active voice is best for most writing situations. I agree that passive voice is not or wrong, but active is much more engaging. This article is pretty spot on with its recommendations and pointers. I'm a writing major and a journalism minor and still have problems with some of this stuff. It just takes a lot of practice to memorize.

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